Objectives:
To learn to analyse our first impressions of The Woman in Black
To learn to improve your written analysis
Task One:
Skim over Chapter 4 again and find any quotations where Kipps describes the Woman in Black. Post each quotation as a comment on this blog post, making sure you enter your name so I know whose is whose.
Task Two:
Type your two reading targets at the top of a word document then answer the following question in a word document then copy and paste your response onto this blog post as a comment:
What is the reader's first impression of the Woman in Black?
"she was dressed in the deepest black," pg.57
ReplyDelete" yes, with the skin streched over her bones" p.61
ReplyDelete"The effect of the illness made her age hard to guess"
ReplyDeleteThe woman is black
DeleteHow does Susan Hill present woman in black in the book woman in black?
The first impression the reader gets of the woman in black is that she is a suffering woman who is worthy of our sympathy because of her unnatural state:
“as though she had been a victim of starvation,” this quote clearly implies that the woman is in an horrible state and that we should feel melancholy for her . Furthermore hill’s use of the word “victim” suggests even more that the reader should not judge her because she doesn’t look that way because she wanted to, she looks this way because it has been forced upon her. “The effect of the illness made her age hard to guess” : Hill uses this description to reinforce the idea that the woman in black is a supernatural figure , making the reader deem her mysterious as well as being sympathetic for her .
This is a really excellent, detailed response Isiah, well done. You explore the subtlety of the character well and I like the way you've integrated a quotation into your analysis however I would still like you to pull more from your main quotation (which might mean that you need to use a longer quotation).
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Target grade: A*
Targets:
1) Analyse structure
2) Explore main quotation in more detail
"she was suffering from some terrible wasting disease," pg.57
ReplyDelete"the thinest layer of flesh was tauntly stretched ans strained across her bones" page 57.
ReplyDelete"...The skin... was tautly stretched and strained across her bones, so that it gleamed with a curious,and blue-white sheen, and her eyes seemed suken back into her head"
ReplyDelete"for not only wasv she extremely pale" p.57
ReplyDelete"...she looked so dreadfully unwell."pg.60
ReplyDelete" but the skin and,it seemed ,only the thinest layer of flesh," pg. 57
ReplyDelete"The young woman with the wasted face" page 61
ReplyDelete"a bonnet-type hat covered her head shaded her face"
ReplyDelete*for the soul of that lonely old woman* page 59
ReplyDelete"such ravages of flesh"
ReplyDelete"she was tall"
ReplyDelete"the young woman with the wasted face"pg.61
ReplyDelete"she looked so dreadfully unwell." pg 60
ReplyDelete"Nor did he look old" pg58
ReplyDelete"she was tall" Pg. 61
ReplyDelete"nor did she look old"
ReplyDelete"her eyes seemed sunken back into her head ." pg.57
ReplyDelete"but the name had stirred some strong emotion in him , all signs of which he endeavoured to supress at once" pg 47
ReplyDelete"the women showed enough to recognised that she was suffering from some terrible wasting disease"
ReplyDelete2as though she had been a victim of starvation," pg.57
ReplyDelete"the effect of the illness made her age hard to guess.." pg58
ReplyDelete"skin streched over her skin" page 61
ReplyDelete"of a not inconsiderable form of beauty" p. 58
ReplyDelete"A bonnet-type hat covered her head and shaded her face" p.57
ReplyDelete"she was exyremley pale"
ReplyDelete"her eyes seems suken back into her head"
ReplyDelete"for not onlywas she extremely pale,even more than a contrast with the blackness of her garments could account for"page 57
ReplyDelete"only a short time away from her death"
ReplyDelete"who perhaps was only a short time away from her own death," pg.58
ReplyDelete"She was dressed in deepest black, in the syle of full mourning that had rather gone out of fashion... page 57
ReplyDeleteextemely pale pg56
ReplyDelete"yes, yes, with the skin stretched over her bones, i could scarcely bear to look at her"pg.61
ReplyDelete"she wore a bonnet type of hat" p.61
ReplyDelete"I could scarcely bear to look at her" page 61
ReplyDelete"so pale and gaunt with disease" pg 58
ReplyDelete"She was tall"
ReplyDeleteThe first impression we get of the woman in black is that she is a very ill woman who is near death. We see this from the quote “the thinnest layer of flesh was tautly stretched over her bones,” this implies that she is very skinny and weak as she can hardly look after herself. Hill uses the word “tautly,” to emphasise how little of her there is. She also uses the phrase “over her bones,” to give the reader an idea that she is so skinny and ill that you can see her bones through her skin. Hill implies that the woman is close to death which might hint to the reader that the woman in black could be a ghost. Therefore the first impression is one of illness and sympathy.
ReplyDeleteGood response here Reece, particularly in terms of language analysis.
DeleteGrade achieved: B
Target grade: A
Target1: Analyse structrue
Target 2: Question narrator's reliability
The first impression of the reader gets of the Women in Black is that she is a character who’s not been caring for herself.”She looks dreadfully unwell.” This implies that Hill describes the mysterious woman as ill or very sick of something that’s happened to her. The word “Dreadfully” mean that she’s not a pretty sight to look at, maybe something’s wrong with her appearance. Her appearance also described as something dreadful, “her eyes seems sunken back into her head” is what Hill describes as something that’s abnormal ,something you don’t see every day. The first impression is therefore something dreadful and abnormal and someone who doesn’t care for herself.
ReplyDeleteExcellent improvement on your last one Diana, well done. I like that you are emphasising the element of mystery.
DeleteGrade achieved: B
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Target1: Analyse structrue
Target 2: More use of "The reader..."
The first impression the reader gets of the Woman in Black is that she is a character that deserves our attention:
ReplyDeleteI know this because in chapter four the quote “A woman, who must have slipped into the church... who stood several rows behind and quite alone, very erect and still, and not holding a prayer book,”
Clearly implies that Kipps feels almost threatened by her presence and very judgmental about her beliefs. Hills use of the word “slipped” tells us that she is a sneaky, cunning, silent person that likes to keep to herself. Similarly Hills use of the phrase “without a prayer book” clearly indicates that, she neither doesn’t care or she isn’t religious.
This is a good improvement on your last piece Teakilla, well done. I particularly like that you have analysed more than one word/phrase from the quotation as per your last target and this means your grade has improved.
DeleteGrade achieved: B
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse structure
2) Explore symbolic meanings- you could have commented on how not having a prayer book could suggest that she was evil and went against the established religious order of the time.
The reader’s first impression of the woman in black is that she is a sick character and the reader is to sympathise her. "she was suffering from some terrible wasting disease." This implies that from her appearance it is shown to Kipps that she is highly unwell and he starts to show sympathy towards her. The use of the word “suffering” implies Kipps’ feeling of sympathy is quite strong because he feels that she is helpless towards her “disease”. Also, Hill’s use of the word “wasting” implies that she is scarce. Furthermore in the beginning of the book Hills mentions ghosts. This show that by using the word “wasting” it is showing that the woman in black is not fully there. The reader knows this but Kipp’s doesn’t.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic improvement on your last piece Breeze- well done! You have met both of your targets (AO6 and AO4) and your analysis is really improving- keep it up!
DeleteGrade achieved: B+
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse narrative reliability
2) Include alternative interpretations
My first impression of the woman in black is her appearance is hideous and frightful.” I could scarcely bear to look at her” from this quote we can clearly infer the woman in black isn’t the best looking person around but the world “scarcely” take her look a stage further, hills lets us know that this woman is so hideous to the eye kipps could only bare to look at her for a few seconds.
ReplyDeleteZack- there are some good ideas here but this is not as good as your last piece as there are too many errors with QWC and it lacks detail.
DeleteGrade achieved: C
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse two seperate words from your quotation
2) Proof-read for errors
My first impressions of the woman in black are quite sceptical due to the fact that she is extremely pale giving me the indication that she is unquestionably ill ,we can imply this from the quote ‘ who perhaps was only a short time away from her own death.’
ReplyDeleteFrom this quote Hills portrays the woman in black as a tall, ill looking person making the reader feel sympathetic for her. Hills use of the word ‘death’ creates an image in the reader’s mind of how pale and diseased she looks.
There is some good analysis here Walid however to access the top grades you need to take your comments beyond the obvious and begin to explore layers of meaning in the language.
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Targets:
1) Analyse more than one word from your quotation
2) Comment on symbolic meanings
The Woman in Black
ReplyDeleteThe first impression the reader might get is that the woman has a death-like figure. This becomes clear in the quote “Even the swift glance that I took of the woman showed me enough to recognise that she was suffering...her eyes seem sunken back into her head.”
This shows that the woman in black has appeared to Kipps as a woman who may be dying, waiting for her funeral. Hill’s use of the word “swift” implies that the quick movement of his look was more than enough to know that she looked like she was decaying. Hill’s may be foreshadowing to the reader that something sinister might happen as previously in the book Kipps had said he will write down his ghost story.
Hills goes further to describe the woman in black in detail so the reader knows how life drained she looked. “But the skin and, it seemed, only the thinnest layer of flesh was tautly stretched and strained across her bones”
Excellent progress on the last one here Kai, well done. You write fluently and have a sophisticated style which really helps your answer. I also like the way you refer out to themes of the book (the supernatural) as well as analysing language and structure.
DeleteGrade achieved: B+
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse more than one word (you could also have chosen "suffering")
2) Analyse narrative reliability
ReplyDeleteThe first impressions the reader receives 0f the mysterious Woman in Black is that she may be trying to attract attention from Kipps as if trying to tell him something:
“I could scarcely bear to look at her”, this quote tells the reader that she is a woman in distress, that is “only a short time away from her death”, but Hill her mannerisms to be the cliché haunted elderly woman. The descriptions given about the Woman in Black is that she contrasts an eerie sense of death and lost hope, but Hill represents her as a never leaving ghost.
Shakeil- you have some absolutely fantastic ideas here- I particularly like what you say about "death and lost hope" however your writing style is letting you down a bit- make sure you proof-read you work. That said, this a big improvement on your last attempt: well done!
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Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Proof-read for errors
2) Analyse the language of your quotations
In the novel, The Woman in Black we get introduced to a woman who gets stated as the Woman in Black. The first impression that the reader would get form her is that she is someone who seems like someone who kind of unwell and diseased.
ReplyDelete“She looked dreadfully unwell”
This shows that Kipps would have thought that something dreadful had happened to her, and that she seems as she is in a unstable position. In this quote Hill uses the word “dreadfully” , what the word makes the reader think is that the extent to which she seems sickened is very far and that she might also be struggling in the way how she is right now. What the reader also sees is that Hill use the word “looked”. This could show that Kipps may had not been sure if she was actually “unwell”. This implies that she may be someone who has a figure to hide and that something else could be hidden.
Excellent detail here again Sam however it still doesn't read as though you're proof-reading your work. Your have good ideas and analyse in detail though, well done.
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Target grade: A*
Targets:
1) Proof-read and correct
2) Analyse structure
The first impression that the reader gets is that the women in black is a character that the reader must give sympathy. “I had heard of certain conditions which caused such terrible wasting, such ravages of flesh,”
ReplyDeleteThis clearly implies that Kipps feels she is a very unwell unhappy woman who he would rather give sympathy and help rather than judge her by her appearance. The word ravages suggest to me that her skin is destroyed and shattered tearing away. The phrase “such ravages of flesh2 shows that she has not taken care of her self .
Another good attempt here Courtney (although you failed to analyse structure this time).
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2) Explore symbolic meanings
The first impression the reader gets of the Woman in Black is that she is a sight pain and abandonment: “I could scarcely look at her”. This implies that Kipps imagination is running wild on him; he feels that she is an accident of Mother Nature or rather he is horrified by its physical appearance who is she? Hill’s use of the word “scarcely” implies she has suffered through her life
ReplyDeleteThis is really nicely phrased Joseph however I would still like to see more from you. You have included language analysis this time which is an improvement however you might need to think about choosing a quotation which lets you say a little more.
DeleteGrade achieved: C+
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse more than one word from each quotation
2) Choose quotations which give you lots you can say
The first impression the reader gets of the Woman in Black is that she is a character with some sense of physical beauty that has been covered up through time.
ReplyDelete"Of a not inconsiderable form of beauty" p. 58
This implies that Kipps does indeed find her beauty intriguing to some extent. Hill uses the word “inconsiderable” as an adjective that should lead us as the reader to think of her beauty (not unimportant or insignificant) as expired. Despite the enclosing mystery of this woman Kipps still sees some sense of beauty in this enigmatic character. This expired look that the Woman in black has foreshadows an event later on in the novel.
This is an excellent start Amandine and a big improvement on your last piece. I'd like to see you choose a slightly longer quotation so that you can find something more substantial to say about structure (as your final sentence here isn't really helping you much) but you write beautifully.
DeleteGrade achieved: B+
Target grade: A*
Targets:
1) Analyse more than one word from the quotation
2) Be specific in your structural analysis
The reader’s first impression of the Women in Black is that she is a character who has been severely injured over her time:
ReplyDelete“...the skin... was tautly stretched and stained across her bones, so that it gleamed with a curious and blue-white sheen, and eyes seemed sunken back into her head” this quote clearly implies that she is not what an ordinary women will look like. Hills use of the word “tautly” means that she is very firm. Hills use this word to show the reader that her face is tightly and stretched suggesting that her face is not in a clear condition.
This is a nice start Jessica but it looks like you've struggled with timing a little here which, of course, affects the mark you receive for the piece. Your target therefore remains the same.
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The first impression the reader gets of the Woman in Black is that she is a character that should be pitied:
ReplyDelete“She was suffering from a terrible wasting disease.” This quote implies that she must of had to deal with a lot during her life because of this disease. The reader would feel sympathy for her to the fact this illness killed her. Hill’s use of the word ‘terrible’ shows that this thing ruined her life causing her not to enjoy the nature of life. When reading this quote the audience may feel that this illness affected her so much that she had to hide behind closed door; locking away her life because she didn’t feel a part of the rest of the village. Hill’s use of the word ‘wasting’ also shows the reader that this sickness that people dreaded took away all the happiness in her life and gave her sorrow. When describing Mrs Drablow Hill’s uses long descriptive sentences so the reader will be able to imagine how she was lying down in her coffin and also be able to see her ‘pale’ face. The first impression is therefore one of a mystery, sympathy and pity.
I think ejiro's is the best because its the longest if you know what i mean
DeleteThis is a really excellent response Ejiro, really well done. You write beautifully and analyse the quotation in detail.
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Target grade: A*
Targets:
1) Analyse structure
2) Analyse symbolic meanings
What is the reader’s first impression of The Woman in Black?
ReplyDeleteThe first impression the reader gets of the Woman in Black is that she’s terrifying:
"yes, yes, with the skin stretched over her bones, I could scarcely bear to look at her..."
This implies that Kipps is terrified because he could only see glimpse of her, since her skin was stretched over her bones. The use of Hills word “scarcely” implies shows that he struggles having a look at her, using the “scarcely” also tells me that Kipps seemed intrigued by the weird looking woman and would’ve like to see another glimpse of her since she had been looking uncharacteristic.
Another good attempt Jawahir however I still need to see you analysing structure to get to the next level though.
DeleteGrade achieved: B-
Target grade: A
Targets:
1) Analyse structure
2) Analyse more than one word from your quotations
The first impression the reader gets of the woman in black is that she’s a character what is very weird and mysterious:
ReplyDelete“She was dressed in deepest black, in the style of full mourning that had rather gone out of fashion”
This tells us as the readers that she is a very dark orientated person and is wearing a very old outfit not of the 20th century which may seem weird to many. Instead of seeing the side that it’s a funeral he is thinking about her outfit which implies he is more interested in what people are wearing then having his full attention on solely on the funeral. Hill uses the words 2deepest black to which tells the reader she is covered in black head to toe but a deep black tells us it’s not a regular black. This implies that even though jkipp hast met her he’s seen her as rather mysterious.
This is a good first attempt Serena, well done. Make sure you proof-read though.
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2) Analyse more than one word from your quotation
The first impression the reader gets of the woman in black is that she is a dying body awaiting her day."The effect of the illness made her age hard to guess”. This shows that Kipps was overwhelmed by the fact that although she looked like she was about to die she still managed to drag herself to the funeral. Hill’s use of the word “Hard” suggests that something she is either seriously unwell or something very bad could have happened to her in her past or a life changing experience.
ReplyDeleteGood progress on the last one here Abou, well done. Your answer in much more structured than previously and this will help you to extend it.
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1) Analyse more than one word from your quotation
2) Analyse symbolic meanings
What is the readers first impression of the Woman In Black?
ReplyDeleteThe reader gets the impression of the woman in black to be worthy of sympathy:
‘Thinnest layer of flesh ...They were generally regarded as incurable’
This quote implies that kips was sympathetic of ‘The Woman in Black’ because he thought that she had something wrong with her because he could see her bones where petruding out of her clothes. Hills uses the word ‘generally’ which makes people start to believe the mystery that took place in the beginning of the book when the three children where telling ghost stories. copyright
This is OK Aimee but is not as detailed as I'd like it to be and your structural link is a little bit tenuous!
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Targets:
1) Analyse more than one word from your quotation
2) Analyse structure in detail
The first impression you get of the woman in black is that she is that she is an unusual character:
ReplyDelete“The young woman with the wasted face,”
This implies that she is unusual because of her appearance. Hills use of the “wasted” implies the futuristic of this woman’s face is out of the ordinary; she looks unusual. The reader can foreshadow that this woman is a ghost makes; the short sentence adds a great effect.
This is a good start and you have identified features well however comments such as "the short sentence adds a great effect" are too vague to help your mark.
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2) Be specific in your analysis
Homework: I think the best paragragh was KAI's. I think this because he made it clear to the person who was reading it. And I believe he also used all the AO things for example ; AO5... he links back to the beginning o the book amd talks about foreshadow... "Hill's may be forshadowing to the reader that someyhig sinister might happen..."
ReplyDeleteEjiro wins a doughnut for being the first person to complete the homework! I'll reveal the winner of the other doughnut (for the person who I think wrote the best answer) once you've done your homework
DeleteHomework: I think that the best answer was ejiro's because her answer was vey detailed and she used all the AO targets for example she used AO6 really well as she used the words ”reader” and ”hill” a lot during her work.
ReplyDeleteI think that the best answer was Ejiro's because she anaysed the question in full detail and her answer also followed the steps that you gave us to a maximum extent.
ReplyDeleteI think that that the best answer was Ejiro's as well because she first answers the question then she goes on to answer the question in good detail. She also uses the AO where she is supposed to describe a language feature or foreshadowing. She does this well. She also analyses a single world by it self and goes in deeply.
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DeleteEjiro's is proving popular an it is certainly a strong answer. Has anyone found a better one? A couple of people have posted theirs in the wrong place (as a comment on the audiobook post)- might be worth having a look at these too...
ReplyDeleteI think that the best answer to the question, "What is the reader's first impression of the Woman in Black?", is Kai's because he completed all the targets:
ReplyDeleteAO1= answer the question with a full sentence
AO2= choose a relevant quotation
AO3= begin explanation with "this shows..." or "this implies..."
AO4= analyse at least one word from the quotation
AO5= analyse a structural device feature (e.g. sentence length/punctuation/foreshadowing)
AO6= use "Hill" and "the reader" throughout
AO7= use a high level vocabulary
Therefore, i believe Kia's is the best answer.
I think the person who best answered the question "what is the readers first impression of the woman in black" is Ejiro. I think this because she's used all of the AO's and has explained herself in full detail.
ReplyDeleteI think the person who best answered the question is me 1.because I did a good job lol 2.I used a quote from the story and I got into detail into the quote and picked one word in the quote that nearly summed it all up and got into more detail within that 3. Used AO1,AO2,AO3,AO4,AO6 which is good enough since I done that paragraph in a short amount of time :3 lol (btw if this homework is up many times its because it keeps on saying I didn't make a comment)
ReplyDeleteI personally think that Ejiro used all AOTargets to answer the question with a full extent of description, she even carryed on the explanation of how the reader would imagine the Woman in Black and she also summarised her paragraph with the orginal point.
ReplyDeleteI think Ejiro had the best answer because she used all target: AO1,AO2,AO3,A04,AO5,AO6,AO7 and she explained herself in full detail.
ReplyDeleteI think the person who best answered the question is Ejiro. I think this because she's used all of the AO's and has explained herself in full detail.E.G she used ao6 quite a lot using the word "reader".
ReplyDeleteI think the person with the best answer is ejiro, she has met the AO targets and has given a detailed description of her first impression of the woman in black to reader
ReplyDeleteI think the best answer was kais because of his depth in explaning
ReplyDeletealso he uses apropriate quotes & meets most if not all of the AO tings
i believe the best paragraph is ejiro she has met the AO target answering the question in full detail analysing specific world she was brilliant just brilliant (btw dnt get gassed i kno where you live )
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ReplyDeleteI think the best paragraph id out of me and teakilla. I spoke about what fashion she had which is the first thing you notice in a person to judge. Teakillas one was full of detail and answered the question best. Kai can get a sticker for the name
HOMEWORK: I think the best paragraph is ejiros because she used all the AO points and gave a detailed description of the Woman in Black
ReplyDeleteI think the best paragraph goes to Ejiro, because she met all the targets, providing a well structured and answered question
ReplyDeleteTheodore's paragraph was the best: he answered the question at the beginning then used a relevant quote to back his paragraph up. Theodore used "Kipps" and "the reader" and "implies". He analysed a specific word and explained the structure of that word- however, there were not as many short sentences. I would grade this a C/B.
ReplyDeleteI think Kai's paragraph was the best becase he used Ao1 the point in the right way, he also uses the words "implies" or "this shows" to analize it in more deapth. He also uses "Kipps". He also analizes a specific word to show us that there is a powerful meaning, not only in the phrase or quote, but in one word.
ReplyDeleteTruthly I think Ejiro's paragraph is the best,in my opinion, because she has clearly used the AO's in good fashion. Therfore, meaning that Ejiro's work is the best.
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